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Entry ‘hook’ for Show Me The Voice

Cetaceans at home beneath the waves

Not my usual frequency–blogging twice in two days–but circumstances dictate. And all writers know how those dreaded circumstances aka deadlines, have a way of changing time-worn habits. If it makes you feel any better, see this as a postscriptum to yesterday’s post, below.

If you have not yet read about Brenda Drake’s Show Me The Voice Blogfest Contest run in cooperation with agent Natalie Fischer, then scroll down to that blog, Blogs and Novels and Voice, for details.

In a word: here is my (updated, pared-down to 250 words) entry to the Voice Blogfest Contest. Many thank-yous to friends–known, loved and unknown bloggers– who critiqued in the very short time we all had to prepare for this adventure. In writing lingo: this is the Chapter One ‘hook’ with which we writers and authors attempt to snare you, dear Reader.

Here goes. Wish me luck.

Name: Marian Youngblood
Title: Green Turtle Cay
Genre: Adult Fiction: Fantasy-Magical Realism


“Next stop Marsh ‘Arbor, Habaco.” The ferry captain’s solid Bahamian voice echoed through the launch. It took Annabelle right back to her teens. With their Miami traffic, what a miracle the Islands still sounded Colonial.

Bimini via Green Turtle Cay
, her ticket said. Closest to Florida, Bimini was considered American—until you got there. So retro. Two stops and she’d be there. Her spirit rose as they headed out from Abaco.

Thirty years of mainland living hadn’t dulled her love of the ocean. Its sheer blue clarity curling around white atolls–amazing fish swarms–she felt comfortable in its watery embrace.

Green Turtle Trench guarded one of Earth’s stable populations of dolphin and basking shark. And shark city was where she was headed—if only for one night. She studied the approaching shore, knowing Tom planned to bring her back in his own boat. Nice of him. The old guy had asked his niece-–his nearest relative-–to check out an offer from a consortium to run a shark center here. Sounded like fun. Paradise for him—a shark man from way back. Green Turtle looked as placid as ever–not a sign of this new project he described. Maybe she’d adapted to change.

Back then, you visited the Islands if you owned an airplane, or a friend’s private yacht transported you magically from Nassau. Nowadays major airlines flew to the doorstep.

When she’d stepped off the plane—when the wall of heat hit her—she felt that childhood pull again, couldn’t wait to get out on the water.
©2011 Marian Youngblood

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March 22, 2011 - Posted by | authors, culture, fiction, novel, writing | , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , ,

7 Comments »

  1. I like this a lot. I’m a forest person, so the ocean is not well known to me, but I can envision the place you write about from this snippet. I’d read more.

    Comment by cat | March 22, 2011 | Reply

  2. Vielen Dank, Kat – Ihre Wissenschaft ganz selbstverständlich — muchas gracias, too for your visit – great to have another nature-lover plus Schriftstellerin! – love your page btw

    Comment by siderealview | March 22, 2011 | Reply

  3. Yep – this is it! Good work. Hasn’t this been a blast?

    Comment by Jan | March 22, 2011 | Reply

  4. Magical realism has to seamlessly integrate the fantastical and the mundane. You have much potential here because of the oceanic setting, as a reader I’d like to know more about Green Turtle Trench.

    Comment by e6n1 | March 22, 2011 | Reply

    • you will — you will — how did you guess!!!!
      thanks for stopping by – don’t know if I can identify you by your moniker, so where was your submission – would love to read

      and yes, Jan – this HAS been a blast

      Comment by siderealview | March 23, 2011 | Reply

  5. Hi again, my blogfest submission was here:

    http://eeleenlee.wordpress.com/2011/03/21/show-me-the-voice-blogfest-contest/

    Comment by e6n1 | March 23, 2011 | Reply

  6. Lovely sharp post. Never thought that it was this easy. Extolment to you!

    Comment by robotsindisguise | April 19, 2011 | Reply


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